[video=youtube;EmPh2yanJHA]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EmPh2yanJHA[/video]
Thoughts on this?
I'd use a less high pitched sound, it's a bit grating.
I think the font thing is because the top line has been stretched vertically ? Would look better if you just increased the font size i think.
The logo and background looks fine to me. Try making the whole thing a second or two longer.